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PostSubject: Monster of Donzo done   Wed Jun 19, 2013 8:41 am





Kaijuu Hoshigaki





You've wasted enough of my time.




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Nicknames: ---Monster of Donzo

Gender: ---Male

Age: ---23

Blood Type: ---AB positive.

Village: ---Donzo

Village Rank: ---ANBU Captain

Skill Rank: ---A


physical information


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  • Height: ---6'7
  • Weight: ---210
  • Measurements:


has size 13 shoes


personality information


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Kaijuu is a very cold person. He does not care for anyone else. He just lives for the fight. To see the life leave another ones eyes. The thrill of blood flying through the air. The sounds of pain and sorrow from others. He enjoys watching a slow death. To see them having there last gasps of air. He will kill quickly if needed. He loves to see the fear in peoples eyes. He wants to fight. He lives for it. But the number one thing he wants more than anything else. Is his own death. He wants to die in a legendary  battle. He would never hold back in a fight. Even against a genin. He would only kill whoever he fights. If for some reason Kaijuu does not want to kill them, that means that in his eyes, they are just too sad to kill. That death would be too much for them. On Kaijuu's down time, He enjoys taking walks by himself and viewing the world. He's not big on staying put too long and enjoys the bar. He finds it to be a good place to relax and enjoy seeing others make a fool of themselves. He enjoys fighting the most. He does not care who it is against. But the one thing he wants more than a fight of glory. A fight among all fights to remember, is his own death. He wishes to die in battle. To be rid of his mortal body weaknesses and become the strongest of the strong. He does not care for anything other than the lust of blood. Well, a lie.


kaijuu does have a “Soft Side” That is simply just him wishing to protect everyone in his village. To keep his home safe. After all it is the place that gave him everything he has. He would gladly do whatever it takes to finish off the people he is fighting He would still kill the people in his village because of the simple fact that they are being cocky. Using him as a shield for other villages. Letting that get in the way of what the village can do and not just him. He likes to spend time at the bar and walk around the village at night. He he enjoys the time he gets to spend alone and hates being around people for too long. He follows his own path of what is right and what is wrong. He does not care what the kage has to say or not.




  • Sexuality: ---straight
  • Likes:

    • fighting
    • killing slow
    • ---the bar
    • finally being killed
    • strong opponents
    • the fear in another's eye
    • ---blood
    • seeing people die
    • sleep
    • ---war





















  • Dislikes:

    • times of peace
    • strange people
    • ---cocky people
    • people too weak
    • other people
    • people he doesn’t know
    • ---not dying how he wants
    • quick deaths

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Clan: ---Hoshigaki (Kisame’s clan)

Ninja Specialization:






  • Main: ---ninjutsu
  • Sub: ---Medical











Elemental Specialization:






  • Main: ---Water


Sub: ---earth










Strengths:





  • speed
  • larger than normal chakra
  • ---accuracy











Weaknesses:





  • going to far
  • killing too many
  • ---reckless











Fighting Style: weapon and hand to hand




INVENTORY










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  • 3 shuriken
  • ---4kunai
  • Normal great sword


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Age 1-5:Kaijuu was always a violent child. Being brought into a violent home that is. When he could walk he was learning to fight. His father always fighting. Kaijuu would have to fight with him. He wanted to win. He wanted to prove to his father that he was strong. however he always worked on his own. Fighting to become the strongest. He wanted to do more. He wanted to fight in wars and win. He wanted to do everything. Kaijuu would laugh at everything he had around him and would be told he had a gift. Having more Chakra than most. He was only 4 and was able to use water jutsus up to B ranked. with no problem. He would have a sparring match with his dad and still not able to land a scratch on him. However that wasn’t the same on himself. His father would leave him bleeding out on the ground. He would say that he needed to get stronger or die right there. And, Kaijuu would become stronger. His father, an ANBU, was known as the most brutal person on the earth and Kaijuu would have to beat him. He needed a way to get stronger. At the age of Five, Kaijuu entered the ninja school in order to become a shinobi of the Donzo village. He was top of his class and could hold his own against the sensei of the school. H faught him and would leave a scar running down the chuunin’s chest.He graduated and was now a genin.


Ages 6-10:On a team of genin much older than him, Kaijuu would hold his own against them and already have them afraid of him. The jounin of the group would watch Kaijuu to make sure he didn’t go on a rampage and attack. at random. People were talking about if it was a good choice to make Kaijuu a shinobi but others said it was good. Maybe he would die on a mission. He would ignore what people had to say about him. Kaijuu hated the village anyways. They looked at his blue shark skin with hate and wanted him and his clan out. But he wasn’t going anywhere. Not until he was strong enough to live on his own. Which he hated more. That he could not do anything by himself. He always needed someone to help him for some reason. He wanted to show the world he was great and not in the shadow of his father At the age of eight, his father vanished. Not even leaving a note. His mother died giving birth to Kaijuu and he was left alone in this house at eight. He didn’t care though. He punched in a picture of his father and watched the blood leave his hand from the glass cutting it. Promising himself that he would find his father and have his final fight. He was on a mission with his fellow team members and  it was to get back stolen money from bandits by any means needed. There was a huge group of people together and it was too much for them to take on in a front up battle. Kaijuu would make the hand sign and create the hidden mist Jutsu. No one could see and one by one they fell down. Kaijuu would sigh as he finished off the last one. falling to the ground choking on his blood. He wanted to take everything out.


Kaijuu found the money with his team behind him and the bandit leader showed up. He would use fire jutsus and keep them back. Kaijuu quickly thought and made water shark jutsu. Having the shark charge at him, the man jumped into the air and was slammed back down by a water dragon. Kaijuu was flying from the air and slammed onto his chest. Cracking the ground and the man spitting out blood. He could hardly move. It was too easy for Kaijuu. His team looked in awe at him.They couldn’t believe this monster was real. But this monster was real. He would go back to his village and find the mission success. He had trained for more years. getting ready for the Chuunin exams.


Ages 11-15:Kaijuu was ready for the chuunin exams. He could use A ranked jutsus with little strain on him. He would pass the written exams with little to no problem. He helped his team get the answers they needed without getting caught and everyone passed. He would work with them for once. He found his way to the forest of death. RIGHT AT HOME! That’s all that Kaijuu could think. A place where anything goes. He just needed to get both scrolls. They already had the earth scroll. They just needed to get the heaven scroll. He would sneak around and fight everyone he found. Already getting himself the Heaven scroll. His team ran to the tower and was stopped by very strong shinobi. Kaijuu knew what he needed to do He would make a swamp under them and fight all of them Shooting a lot of sharks at his opponents and end all of them. Making it to the tower, Kaijuu waited for the matches to start. it was a fun place really. Fighting and winning his fight no problem. Kaijuu then had some time to relax before the finals.


Kaijuu was sitting at his house alone eating when he heard laughing. He knew that laugh anywhere throwing three kunai at where the sound was coming from. The man blocked them still smiling and laughing. It was his father. “Looks like you’ve grown. But you’re still so slow.” He said and telling his son about what he still needed to do. Leaving the house again. he dropped his headband and Kaijuu saw the scratch through it. He was banished it seems. Kaijuu smiled widely waiting for the day to come.


At the finals, Kaijuu would fight hard. Using his water jutsus and throwing them out of the ring. Knocking everyone out. He didn’t care either way. But he was made chuunin that day. He would nod his head. Working harder of the day to come. to his goal. His new goal. He wanted to kill his father. One day, one day will come when that wish will become real.


Ages 16-Now:Kaijuu only at 16, was known as the youngest ANBU in the village. He would have a mask on. Always hiding his face. Never showing it again. Shortly people forget who he was. Thinking that the Kaijuu they knew died. He was someone else. No one remembered his blue skin for it was all covered. It was amazing how everyone forgot what he was as soon as he had left for so long in training alone and only coming out covered from head to toe. Only his hair showing. One day when he was sitting at his house when a knock at the door showed itself. He was handed a mission. S ranked mission and it was to hunt down a man who has been killing many people on a crossroad. He would follow down it in the middle of the night. He remembered the road well. For it was where him and his father would practice all the time. Kaijuu still had the scar down his chest from his father. Going from one end to the other. Then it happened. Kaijuu grabbed three kunai that were flying through the air at him and threw them into a different tree. The person jumpped out of the way and in front of Kaijuu. His father for the last time. Kaijuu would move the mask out of the way of his face. Showing his own smile. The two looked just alike now. The same eyes, the same hair, the same smile. He made a flood on the floor and had the place full of water. Kaijuu would dodge the attacks and so would his father. His father shot twenty sharks at him and Kaijuu would make just as many. Hitting all of them as the water would fall down. his father showing up behind him and doing water prison jutsu. However, Kaijuu already had that planned out. The water clone would now disappear from the prison and Kaijuu was under water. Shooting a water dragon at his father. He would jump back and out of the way. Sliding on the water.


Kaijuu shot out of the water like a shark. and closelined his father back into the water. Only to find that was a water clone as well. Kaijuu turned around swinging back his kunai and catching the blade his father pulled to slice Kaijuu in half. Blood sliding down Kaijuu’s cheek from the tip just hardly touching him. He would push him off and kick his father in the gut. Making more hand signs and making a huge vortex of water fly out and slam into his father. Hitting a tree and sitting there laughing at his son’s improvement. He would send off more sharks and Kaijuu would throw kunai with paper bombs on them. Blowing up all of the sharks.He would then make a hidden mist jutsu and sneak underwater. His father though had the same idea. They both clashing underwater. He would then need to finish it. His father making the biggest water dragon he’s ever seen and Kaijuu making a giant shark bomb. They clashed and it looked like the shark was eating the dragon and getting bigger. Kaijuu laughed as it crashed into his father. Slamming into the ground and stopping the fight as a huge explosion of water shot out. The water finally died down and blood made its way to Kaijuu’s feet. He walked over seeing his dad missing the right part of his chest and most of his hip. He could not speak but he still had that smile on his face. Closing his eyes as he would die. Kaijuu’s dream finally being real. He would walk away. Getting ready for his new life to start and more wars to fight in.







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PostSubject: Re: Monster of Donzo done   Wed Jun 19, 2013 9:49 am

No S rank in umi available

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PostSubject: Re: Monster of Donzo done   Sat Jun 22, 2013 9:58 pm

Done. And please, wait for my app to be done next time. find it a little rude to post on an unfinished app
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PostSubject: Re: Monster of Donzo done   Sat Jun 22, 2013 11:05 pm


    You seem to be having some problems with the template due to your editor mode (if you look yours is different from what it's suppose to be like) or are you find with the way it is?

    If you need help I'll edit it for you and then we can continue with the full review.


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PostSubject: Re: Monster of Donzo done   Sat Jun 22, 2013 11:06 pm

I am owner of the site and can post in any app at any given time so do not need permission that is all.

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PostSubject: Re: Monster of Donzo done   Sun Jun 23, 2013 8:31 am

I'm fine with how the temp is.
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PostSubject: Re: Monster of Donzo done   Mon Jun 24, 2013 8:03 am

A rank can only have 8 equipment, I don't know if you can have 100 of each of those items
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PostSubject: Re: Monster of Donzo done   Mon Jun 24, 2013 6:52 pm

Done
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PostSubject: Re: Monster of Donzo done   Tue Jun 25, 2013 2:39 am

Changed villages to Danzo village for the ANBU Captain rank they got open.
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PostSubject: Re: Monster of Donzo done   Wed Jun 26, 2013 8:15 am

  • The personality describes someone who probably wouldn't be outside a mental institution, let alone in a position of power. Why would they trust someone who would want to kill villagers for expecting him to do his job as their ANBU captain?
  • Be specific on the strengths and weaknesses. How much more chakra than is normal for his rank? What is he more accurate with, and by how much?
  • Killing too many people doesn't seem like much of a weakness, unless we plan to RP through him losing his command and possibly becoming an outlaw.
  • Huge amounts of unnecessary spacing.
  • Swords aren't simple equipment, especially rarer ones like greatswords. Describe it with the equipment template.
  • Ice is a KKG, you have to have the proper clan to use it.
  • A-rank characters can only start with one S-rank jutsu.
  • Still missing the password
  • Still haven't fixed the face claim thing. Say it was an original artwork, credit the artist if possible.


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He was only 4 and was able to use water jutsus up to B ranked.
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He would have a sparring match with his dad and still not able to land a scratch on him.
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He was top of his class and could hold his own against the sensei of the school. H faught him and would leave a scar running down the chuunin’s chest.He graduated and was now a genin.
I have to ask. Is this a parody?

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